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I want to hold you in my arms;
like I did once.

Forever.

I want to see you smile;
like I do every day.

     Forever.

I want to look into your eyes;
like I’ve done so many times.

          Forever.

I want to tell you I love you,
like I’ve tried.

                And in time,
you’ll be mine.

I’ll kiss you under the moonlit sky,
underneath the stars.

                    Then you’ll be mine…
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:iconaborro:
Aborro Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
but the

"And in time,
you’ll be mine."

part doesn't really fit the composition, but it fits the wording, hard case...
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
o well
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:iconaborro:
Aborro Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the composition and it is really cute ^^
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks
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:iconmissdarling23:
MissDarling23 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Student General Artist
This is really nice! :aww:
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you! if i didn't already respond... v6 is so confusing!
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:iconwillowwolf23:
Willowwolf23 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Student General Artist
I like it, it's very well written. :nod:
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you!
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:iconxxxmorbidprincessxxx:
xXxMorbidPrincessxXx Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
Aw! So...forceful<3
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks!
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:iconartistkrys:
artistkrys Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
I love it!
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you! :D
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:iconartistkrys:
artistkrys Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2008
Your welcome!
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:iconwhitefire806:
Whitefire806 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
so sweet! I love the feeling of longing that comes from this poem!
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks!
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:icondominantdoberman:
DominantDoberman Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Photographer
:clap:
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
:hug:
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:iconsinfultemptation:
SinfulTemptation Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Filmographer
aww this is so cute! I love it!
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you...
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:iconsinfultemptation:
SinfulTemptation Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008   Filmographer
No problem.
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:iconlydiaicywolf25:
lydiaicywolf25 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
:aww:
I Really Like That One,
Fantastic! :aww: :hug:
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks!
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:iconnekocat2018:
nekocat2018 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
Nicely done there. I like the way that you placed the words, so that readers would read it differently. :D
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks :D
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:iconnekocat2018:
nekocat2018 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
You're welcome :D
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:iconjoyhargreaves:
JoyHargreaves Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008
fantastic!
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you!
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:iconmilitarymarinebratt:
militarymarinebratt Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
this is so cute!!!! i really like it :aww:
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:icondarkpiano7:
darkpiano7 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
thank you :D
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:iconmilitarymarinebratt:
militarymarinebratt Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
:D
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